As the author, you decide which words you want to emphasize.
I wrote these words in a first draft of my book, Unleash the Writer Within: I am a passionate person; I can be a passionate writer if I choose. When I read the sentence again, I decided that the strongest part of the sentence should be I can be a passionate writer. It's the being and not the choosing that I wanted to emphasize, so I revised it to read: I am a passionate person; if I choose, I can be a passionate writer.
Here are two examples from my students.
* Richard rattled the bushes with a stick he broke loose from a tree on the way in. (Better: With a stick he had broken loose from a tree. . . he rattled the bushes. Bushes is stronger than the preposition in.)
* He heaved a sigh of relief, although drenched in fearful sweat. (Reverse the clauses.)
Put the emphatic part of the sentence at the end.
Those words make the most impact on readers.
________________________________ Unleash the Writer Within by Cecil Murphey (Wheaton, IL: 2012).
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Cec is thinking about doing a one-day seminar on the inner writer, based on his book Unleash the Writer Within. If you had the opportunity to attend a seminar on the inner writer, what would you want Cec to address? Email me with your suggestions.